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WHAT IS WRONG WITH THIS SCENE, THAT IT DRIVES ME TO THIS?
Well, aside from the fact that everybody dies, and Kael goes crazy and kills herslf
I think I’ve identified the source of the problem.
So it’s done. This scene is totally on drugs, but some kind of a pattern for the rewrite is down in text. I need to back this up… *runs away briefly*
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“I dunno, I think I missed the climax in there. I got all the build-up, and now I get we’re into the denouement, but… yeah, not sure where that climax was.”
-A friend, who is reading my first draft.
And the answer? It’s HIDING. The climax is HIDING. SNEAK-RATIVELY.
*cue mad, hysterical laughter*
I still have hope that there’s something good in there, it’s just WAY buried. Maybe the soldering iron part? ^_^
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